Pass the Story V1

Walt: punctuate our work 

Original version

One day there was a picnic and there was a basket of a whole bunch of various types of veggies and fruit. Well the people were all enjoying eating together a thunderstorm came so they ran inside forgetting to bring the food. Lightning struck the basket of fruits and veggies then suddenly all the food came to life. The sandwiches were knights and the pineapple was the king and all other things were royalty!  They are gonna put them in the dungeon! They were laughing like witches, BROUHAHA. They grabbed the people and a portal came! Food land! Everything was yum but they still wanted to escape. They saw gummy bears as villagers and all other things! They were trying to eat it all but they were handcuffed by the marshmallow police. Now they saw the castle! Every sweets in the world! Yum!! Then a gummy girl came and she had the power to turn everything back to normal and to turn into normal people. So she gave power to everyone and everyone was happy to be normal. Then there was a queen that was a lollipop a giant one that it couldn’t fit in my mouth the end.BYE BYE.


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Edited Version

One day there was a picnic and there was a basket of a whole bunch of various types of veggies and fruit. Well the people were all enjoying eating together a thunderstorm came so they ran inside forgetting to bring the food. Lightning struck the basket of fruits and veggies then suddenly all the food came to life. The sandwiches were knights and the pineapple was the king and all other things were royal. A portal came, Food land! . They saw gummy bears as villagers and all other things. Now they saw the sweet kingdom. Every sweets in the world the fruit people started complaining that the candy tasted worse than the fruit so the grapes jumped on the lollipops and the grapes exploded and the lollipops got shot far away. The sandwich knights that were for some reason also ninjas charged into battle and started throwing sliced up tomatoes at the marshmallows then all the fruit sandwich knights, and vegetables over powered the sweets and won

Task description: 
We played a game called 'Pass the Story'. We would write a little bit of the story, and then pass it to the person next to us. They would then continue on the story. After the story was finished, we edited it to make sure it was punctuated properly.

Wero word find

WALT: understand figurative and descriptive language as we read. Task description: We needed to put in words in the word find box and then put in random letters in the empty spaces

This is my other maths work for this week

WALT: use compass points and directions.
Task description: We needed to fill out the degrees the circle

This is my maths work for this week

Task description: We needed to fill out the degrees the circle

Maths work

WALT: convert units of measurement.
 Task description: We needed to complete our tasks by writing down the working out in our books then putting the information on the slides.

Descriptive writing

WALT: paint an image in the readers mind.

Tress

The trees stood tall on the ground as they were full of leaves that rustled against each other.

Leaves

The leaves moved slowly on the trees as some glided down onto the ground.

Grass

The grass on the ground filled me with calm with they’re bright lime colour as the kept still.  

Imagination/Sticks

The sticks that once belonged to the tree now rest on the floor well other sticks our kept at their home.

Task Description

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First we needed to think of things you can see in the picture

Then imagine something that fits this picture, but is not in the picture

Then we go to write the descriptive sentences that describe the scene as a piece of writing.

Hour of code certificate

Descriptive writing

Walt: paint an image in the readers mind.

 

Ocean

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The bright blue glistening water moved slow and calm lying over the sand close to the shore.

Sand

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The millions of golden shining gorgeous sand stood still on the beach.

Sky

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A beautiful bright sky stood high as it shone bright over the beach.

Imagination > People

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Everybody ran wildly everywhere and swam everywhere enjoying themselves.

Task Description

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First we needed to think of things you can see in the picture

Then imagine something that fits this picture, but is not in the picture

Then we go to write the descriptive sentences that describe the scene as a piece of writing.