Pass the Story V1

Walt: punctuate our work 

Original version

One day there was a picnic and there was a basket of a whole bunch of various types of veggies and fruit. Well the people were all enjoying eating together a thunderstorm came so they ran inside forgetting to bring the food. Lightning struck the basket of fruits and veggies then suddenly all the food came to life. The sandwiches were knights and the pineapple was the king and all other things were royalty!  They are gonna put them in the dungeon! They were laughing like witches, BROUHAHA. They grabbed the people and a portal came! Food land! Everything was yum but they still wanted to escape. They saw gummy bears as villagers and all other things! They were trying to eat it all but they were handcuffed by the marshmallow police. Now they saw the castle! Every sweets in the world! Yum!! Then a gummy girl came and she had the power to turn everything back to normal and to turn into normal people. So she gave power to everyone and everyone was happy to be normal. Then there was a queen that was a lollipop a giant one that it couldn’t fit in my mouth the end.BYE BYE.


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Edited Version

One day there was a picnic and there was a basket of a whole bunch of various types of veggies and fruit. Well the people were all enjoying eating together a thunderstorm came so they ran inside forgetting to bring the food. Lightning struck the basket of fruits and veggies then suddenly all the food came to life. The sandwiches were knights and the pineapple was the king and all other things were royal. A portal came, Food land! . They saw gummy bears as villagers and all other things. Now they saw the sweet kingdom. Every sweets in the world the fruit people started complaining that the candy tasted worse than the fruit so the grapes jumped on the lollipops and the grapes exploded and the lollipops got shot far away. The sandwich knights that were for some reason also ninjas charged into battle and started throwing sliced up tomatoes at the marshmallows then all the fruit sandwich knights, and vegetables over powered the sweets and won

Task description: 
We played a game called 'Pass the Story'. We would write a little bit of the story, and then pass it to the person next to us. They would then continue on the story. After the story was finished, we edited it to make sure it was punctuated properly.