shaking it he winds were making the shaking rustling coconut trees blow through the cold winter breeze.The tall shaking grass fearing the shocked people. Hiding behind the long coconut tree waiting for them to be eaten alive .
In the distance the people were screaming in fear running from the ferocious growling Taniwa roaring against the frightened people. The Taniwha had a long back spiky spine tail to whack his enemies.
He had claws sharp as knives so he can cut through skin .
Your first paragraph doesn't quite make sense. I do love how descriptive your writing is becoming though. Keep up your writing son as this helps to improve the way you structure your sentences!
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